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the veins along my racing heart are rivers.

their waterfalls cascade into my stomach,
and hit the bottom with an empty thump.

waves run along the inner linings of my lungs,
crashing into every breath.
no wonder I can never seem to take in enough air.

the bottom of my throat is consumed by a whirlpool.
it steals all of my words,
and tucks them deep into the crevices of my bones.

the pressure of all these words under my skin builds up,
so that every so often a flood hits my brain,
and all my thoughts are scrambled up and confused.

some days I wish for a tsunami
to wash away all of these helpless scars.
I keep being questioned on how I feel and as usual, I can never quite put my thoughts and feelings into words, so I say the very cliched, 'I'm fine.'

This poem shows my reality.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, I wanted to let you know I've used your lovely title in my newest Title Poem, 'your teeth leave different scars'. If you wanted to read it, the link is [link] - but this comment is really just to let you know how I've made use of your gorgeous title. :)
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this part:
"it steals all of my words,
and tucks them deep into the crevices of my bones."

Really nice, consistent imagery. :)
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's my favorite part too. thanks. :)
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Poelee Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
Wow, this is some really beautiful writing. As I read this poem, I could completely understand the physical sensations you describe, as well as the overall mood. Great work!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, your comment meant a lot. :) check out more of my gallery?
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful extended metaphor, lovely work. <3
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. :)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   Writer
:+fav: Congrats on the DLD "Pick of the Day." The last two lines in particular won me over. Thank you.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow thank you. :)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   Writer
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :D
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013
This is really amazing =)
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you. that means a lot. :)
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
Your welcome =)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know I've featured this piece in my journal: [link] :)
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This is really, really beautiful because it's so honest and relatable.

Anyone who's had any sort of issues, on some level, can relate to this, and I think that's a lovely quality to write about! It won't target a specific person. (Maybe some more than others, but still.)

The last two lines are sad. You ended on a really strong note, which is delightful. This was a genuinely enjoyable read!

The sadness in it added, since I could feel it, too. Wonderfully done!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I wanted to take a memory of my own that only I would relate to, and change it into something that more could relate to. thanks, your comment means a lot! :)
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is stunning, in beautiful words it captures the confusion of emotions that we all live with but rarely put into words. Gorgeous.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much. :) check out the rest of my gallery?
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll see what I can do - unfortunately I already have about a hundred deviations in my list to go through for catch-up just since yesterday!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow. haha well no pressure. :D
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... you've taken a subject that's both powerful and calm like water, and using our bodies for reference, turned it into a real metaphor for pure emotion.

That takes some serious skill... to mix depression and/or emotion with how our bodies are composed; very imaginative and, dare I say, "flows" magnificently.

Keep up the astounding work, it was really a pleasure to check this out. =)
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, your comment meant a lot! and thanks for the fave. :) check out the rest of my gallery if you get the chance!
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's my pleasure, and I'll definitely think about it. Lot of potential to be found here. =)
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hahha thank you. :)
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Student Writer
I feel your pain. Don't you just hate it when people ask if you are okay?
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YES. haha it bothers me because it forces me to lie. Or be forced to answer endless questions.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Writer
*sigh* People sometimes...
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not their fault I suppose, they're only trying to show they care. But yes, it does get annoying.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Student Writer
Yeah.
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