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the veins along my racing heart are rivers.

their waterfalls cascade into my stomach,
and hit the bottom with an empty thump.

waves run along the inner linings of my lungs,
crashing into every breath.
no wonder I can never seem to take in enough air.

the bottom of my throat is consumed by a whirlpool.
it steals all of my words,
and tucks them deep into the crevices of my bones.

the pressure of all these words under my skin builds up,
so that every so often a flood hits my brain,
and all my thoughts are scrambled up and confused.

some days I wish for a tsunami
to wash away all of these helpless scars.
I keep being questioned on how I feel and as usual, I can never quite put my thoughts and feelings into words, so I say the very cliched, 'I'm fine.'

This poem shows my reality.
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bloodawni Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, I wanted to let you know I've used your lovely title in my newest Title Poem, 'your teeth leave different scars'. If you wanted to read it, the link is [link] - but this comment is really just to let you know how I've made use of your gorgeous title. :)
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minninnewah Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this part:
"it steals all of my words,
and tucks them deep into the crevices of my bones."

Really nice, consistent imagery. :)
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WritingObsessed Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's my favorite part too. thanks. :)
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:iconpoelee:
Wow, this is some really beautiful writing. As I read this poem, I could completely understand the physical sensations you describe, as well as the overall mood. Great work!
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WritingObsessed Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, your comment meant a lot. :) check out more of my gallery?
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TheChesherCat Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful extended metaphor, lovely work. <3
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WritingObsessed Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
:+fav: Congrats on the DLD "Pick of the Day." The last two lines in particular won me over. Thank you.
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WritingObsessed Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow thank you. :)
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