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It's 4 am
and you find yourself humming a tune
you heard once when you were nine
and you're screaming at the moon
because it seems to have lost its shine

It's 4 am
And all your words tangle up
and you slur as if you've had too much to drink
you're whining like a little lost pup
and cry because you've forgotten how to wink

It's 4 am
and your mind's a mess
you should go to sleep, but not just yet
your eyes start to droop, confess
and your very fingertips are filled with regret
inspired by a conversation about how our minds seem to melt by the time 4 am comes around. comments are always appreciated. :D
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013
Awesome =)
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hehe thank you again. :D
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
You're Welcome, again, OH! And THANKS FOR THE LLAMA!!! <3
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha no problem. XD
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NightlyLies Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
love this, <3
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks. :)
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no-ones--Cat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so true... and of course also really good
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hahah thank you. :D and thank you for faveing it. :D
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Namuamazing Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing poem! I have written many poems but I've ran out of ideas! Someone help me with this!!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. it's probably just writer's block. search online for some writing activities, or prompts. those usually help me. write about absolutely anything, your room, the object you're holding, yourself, a friend, a dream, anything at all.
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Namuamazing Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I wrote about an EXTREMELY creepy dream I had about 2012. I think I'm going to submit it. Just to scare everyone xD.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha you should. i love scary stories. i havent had a nightmare in a while... which is actually quite upsetting cause they usually give me inspiration. plus i love the rush it gives you. :D
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Namuamazing Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I submitted it! And a bunch of stuff I drew! Check it out!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
all right, i will. :D
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turquoise-truck Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The first stanza is the best. But the whole poem is just awesome anyway.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:) thank you.
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stickygirl999 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The first stanza is the best, in my opinion. :)
Great job.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you. and yeah, the first stanza is my favorite as well.
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AdeliseEclair Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh the things that comes to our mind at 4 am
they could be good or bad or just dark twisted xD
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hehe. mostly dark twisted. ;)
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AdeliseEclair Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
LOl
your right on that XD
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Smofys Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist
This is awesome ^^ great job!!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. :D check out the rest of my poetry if you'd like. :)
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Smofys Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist
Of course I will ^^ when I get to my lap I'll +watch you 'cause I'm in my iPod
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D yay, thanks.
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Smofys Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist
np :D I already read your poems, they're awesome!! ^^
later I'll read your story because right now I'm sleepy xD
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you. that's always great to hear. :D ok cool. good night. :)
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Aceofhearts126 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing!!! That is me well at 4 am!!!
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ahah. thank you. :)
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Aceofhearts126 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem =D
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